考研英语作文评改系列（三）

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　　题目：2005年考研英语一小作文
　　Part A
　　51. Directions：
　　Write a letter to your university library, making suggestions for improving its service.
　　You should write about 100 words on ANSWER SHEET 2.
　　Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use “Li Ming” instead.
　　Do not write the address. (10 points)
　　学生习作原文：
　　To Whom It May Concern,
　　I am a student in this university who often go to the library to spend my spare time. I am writing this letter to offer some suggestions about your service. Generally speaking, the serviceyou provide is pretty good, but there still are a few problems more or less. My proposals are as follows.
　　Firstly, could you please bring in some latest books and magazines? Most of books are so old that we can not extend our horizons by reading them .Secondly, I would appreciate it if you could extend the days we can keep the books on to two months instead of a month. It is too short for us to read a book carefully after all.
　　I am looking forward your reply, I sincerely hope that my proposals would be considered and positive changes take place in this regards.(in this regards可去掉)
　　Your sincerely
　　LingMing

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　　总评：
　　语法功底还是比较扎实的，使用了课上所学的句型，词组以及so...that...等亮点句型。不足之处在于：平时练写作文不多，因此小错误不少，细节上还有很多有待提高的地方，此外，前后句的逻辑衔接要有意识的注意，这一点通过更多的练写可以逐渐提高。
　　（本文作者为中公考研辅导老师——陈鹏）