考研英语作文评改系列（二）

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题目：2013年考研英语大作文

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　　学生习作原文：
　　Recently, there has been a growing concern among the public about the topic of the choice after graduation. As is depicted in the picture, the graduates are facing four different choices which are as follows: searching a job, pursuing a further study, going aboard, starting a business.
　　Simple as the picture is, it is very clear that the drawer intends to remind us that it is time for us to have to make a choice about future. As far as I am concerned, as long as you work hard, no matter which road you will choose, you will have a promising future. As the saying says, where there is a will, there is a way.
　　As a student upon graduation, it is time to concern about your future. If you intend to go aboard search a job, you should learn English well. If you plan to take part in postgraduate entrance examination, you are better to prepare for it carefully. Whether you choose to search a job or start a business, you should learn to make a perfect resume and take part in internship.
　　Through the analysis above, what I want to emphasize is that we are supposed to have a clear understanding of your future and prepare for it. Only by do this can you have a fantastic life!

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　　总评：与此前作文相比，该篇习作文进步较大。许多课上学过的东西都在尝试使用，值得肯定。
　　就目前的情况来看，进一步的提高可从三方面入手：
　　第一，继续扩大自己的词汇量，特别是注意积累在写作时可以使用的高级词汇，通过多看高质量的范文，去留心一下同样的表达，别人会使用哪些词汇。
　　第二，使用的句型结构可以更丰富一些，具体来说，体现在从句的使用上，再花一点时间去看看考研英语中的四种重要从句——主，宾，定，状。
　　第三，注意避免小的语法错误，以免影响评分人对作文的整体印象。
　　（本文作者为中公考研辅导老师——陈鹏）