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考研英语小作文感谢信(8-10分)范文赏析二

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发表于 2016-7-25 13:25:38 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  考研英语待批改作文:
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  Dear Eleven
  I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my Olympic Game in Maths. I fear that I would have been give it up early.
  Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
  Yours sincerely,
  Li Ming
  考研英语作文批改点评如下:
  Dear Eleven,
  I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my (加上study of)Olympic Game in Maths(奥数是Mathematic Olympiad ). I fear that I would have been give(改为giving) it up early.
  Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
  Yours sincerely,
  Li Ming
  8分
  同学你好,这篇小作文整体来讲写的不错。建议你如果遇到某些不确定但又不是非常重要的专有名词,可以改为其他有把握的词,例如本篇作文中提到的奥数,完全可以改为其他的比赛。
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