考研英语小作文批改：感谢信0-4分例文4

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    Dear Bob,
    I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm help in the process of my seeking job conformed to my past decades training, after i graduated from peking university.
    If it had not been for your assistance in recommendation to the prestigious company in China. i fear that i would have been on the job road back and forth .i really appreciate this precious opportunity ,which you offered. every one agrees that it was you who wrote a letter to the esteemed company boss, regarding as my qualifications ,education back -ground ,and my special skills at computer program which i have a huge intrest in. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! please accept my gratitude.
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
    Dear Bob,
    I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm help in the process of my(删除my) seeking job conformed to my past decades training, after i（大写）graduated from peking university(两个单词的首字母大写).
    If it had not been for your assistance in recommendation （改为recommending）to the prestigious company in China. i(大写)fear that i would have been on the job road （中式英语）back and forth .i really appreciate this precious oppotunity(拼写错误opportunity) which you offered. every one(首字母大写) agrees that it was you who wrote a letter to the esteemed company（删除） boss, regarding as(删除) my qualifications ,education back -ground ,and my special skills at computer program which i have a huge intrest in(删除). Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! please（首字母大写）accept my gratitude.
    My sincerely,
    Li Ming
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    同学你好，作文内容很丰富，但是你的表达能力还有待提高，而且要注意书信的写作格式，以及大小写的问题。