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英语复习资料：作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理。
考研英语待批改作文：
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第五篇
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.
I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory（单词拼写错误,改为memory card） is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is（删除） regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.（该句的意思是，由于上面提到的两个问题，使我感觉…）
I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile（单词拼写错误，改为mobile） phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund(改为 give me a full refund), and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
3分
考研小作文的字数要求是100词，不要超过太多，考试时间很紧张，把过多的时间用在写小作文上是不合理的。一定要正确理解形式宾语。
小作文很重视作文的逻辑性，因此不要在逻辑方面出现大的问题，这篇作文中，由于你对形式宾语的理解偏差，导致这篇作文的逻辑出现问题，这会对分数产生很大影响。
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发表于 2017-8-6 15:45:43