考研英语小作文批改：投诉信0-4分例文3

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    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am a buyer of your online store and I bought a mobile phone last week. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about some problems after I use it during a short period of time.
    The reason for my dissatisfaction is that it is unconvenience to use it and I cannot stand it. In the first place, the buttery needs recharging after using mere four hours, and I must take my charger with me when I go out for a while. In addition, the buttom are too small that it is nearly difficult to type anything with them. Under these circumstances, I find it so hard to use it in my daily life.
    I appreciate it very much if you could change my phone for another new one that works well, preferably receive a refund for it, and I would like to have this matter settled by you within a week.
    Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am a buyer of your online store and I bought a mobile phone last week. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about some problems after I use（改为using） it during (for)a short period of time.
    The reason for my dissatisfaction is that it is unconvenience （改为inconvenient）to use it and I cannot stand it. In the first place, the buttery (battery)needs recharging after using（加for） mere four hours, and I must take my charger with me when I go out for a while. In addition, the buttom（拼写错误，导致我不清楚你要表达的意思） are too small that it is nearly difficult to type anything with them. Under these circumstances, I find it so hard to use it in my daily life.
    I appreciate it very much if you could change my phone for another new one that works well, preferably receive a refund for it, and I would like to have this matter settled by you within a week.
    Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
    4分
    同学你好，标点符号与后面的单词要空一格。建议你写完作文后再检查一遍，如果仅仅是因为拼写错误，造成老师对整篇作文的理解出现偏差，最终影响分数是得不偿失的。