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To whom it may concern,
I’m a senior student from Wuhan University. Supported by my parents, I want to contribute to Project Hope by offering financial aid to a child with an attitude of hard studying and not being at school just because cannot afford the tuition（建议使用定语从句表达，who studies hard and is forced to drop out for the reason that he cannot afford the tuitions）. I will offer two years（’） tuition and keep in touch with the child by letter to encourage he or she（him or her） to study well. After I graduate from school, I would like to offering （still like to offer）financial aid to the child (删除)to help he or she（him or her） accomplish all elementary education when I have（since I will have） a stable source of incoming（复数incomings）.
Your（Yours） sincerely,
Li Ming
点评：5-6分
文章内容基本符合写作要求，结构清晰，但是语言表达欠佳，还比较受中文表达的影响。建议在今后的学习中，注意多加研读写作范文，学习优秀的英文表达。
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发表于 2017-8-6 15:44:44