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Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Jane. I am living in Shanghai, having a stable income all along. I want to contribute to you to aid a child in a remote area. I have no special requirements, but it will be better, if I can find a nearly （删除）7-year-old girl who is the same age with my daughter.
My daughter and I have a plan to assist her with her growth（删除） in her youth. First, we are willing to offer her tuition fee duing（改为during） her whole educational period. Next, we will contact her by letters so as to share our life with each other including our happiness and sadness, which makes her feel the love and care from others. Then, we will send her all kinds of books that might enlighten her and enrich her feelings and thoughts. Furthermore, we will go to her hometown to visit her or invite her to have a trip to （建议改为in）our city during her summer vacations. We believe all of these we provide will bring her unforgettable experiences in her lifetime. Meanwhile, we will be （删除）benefit from the aid to （改为for）her as well.
Looking forward to hearing from you ASAP.
Sincerely yours,
Li Ming
点评：6-7分
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发表于 2017-8-6 15:44:38