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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:55 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As shown in picture, in the river, rubbish has been threw by two tourists who sitting on a boat. At this time, the river is wasted already. The fish bad been eaten by the dirty water.
Environment protection should been have in the modern time. It is a common observation that a river is likely to break down without protect, likewise if the public have no awareness of environment protection, you may be have nothing expect a bleak picture of environmental. When the whole community is effected by such social disease, the world will become as cold as stone , there goes no trees ,no clear water to drink , no food and no human beings .We will rows with planet where could lived .
An average citizen is advised to build environmental sense. To be sure, educators should regularly make it clear that in our country “good” is sustainable, “bad” is contamination. Therefore, I regard it imperative for the public to abandon pollution and have consciousness of surroundings. 考研英语作文批改点评如下:
As(加is)shown in(加定冠词the) picture, in the river, rubbish has been threw by two tourists who(加are) sitting on a boat. At this time, the river is wasted(这里应该用polluted) already. The fish bad been eaten by the dirty water.Environment protection should been have(应该是have been) in the modern time. It is a common observation that a river is likely to break down without protect, likewise if the public have no awareness of environment protection, you may be(去掉)have nothing(加不定式to)expect a bleak picture of environmental. When the whole community is effected by such social disease, the world will become as cold as stone , there goes no trees ,no clear water to drink , no food and no human beings .We will rows with planet where could lived .An average citizen is advised to build environmental sense. To be sure, educators should regularly make it clear that in our country “good” is sustainable, “bad” is contamination. Therefore, I regard it imperative for the public to abandon pollution and have consciousness of surroundings.点评:9分跑题了。这篇作文的主题是旅游与环保。第一段中对图片的描写最好再详细一点。
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