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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:50 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As is vividly depicted in theportrayal, two tourists are going sight-seeing on asmall boat which is paddling by an elder. They laugh and cheer with an exciting mind. Meanwhile, they throw their rubbish into the lake. Furthermore, the lake has almost filled up with various of rubbish, for instance, cans, plastic bags , fishes bones, bottles, banana skins, watermelon rinds and so on. And under the picture, there is an annotation which says: surplus of journey.
     The cartoon indicated that with the growing numbers of people spring up to the tourist spots, the environment in tourist attractions are polluted. For the strengths of development of tourism, the more visitors come to the scenic spots, the more financial benefit results they brings about to the government. For the shortcoming of it, unfortunately, the more tourists coming, the more seriously pollution they brings about to the nature. Accordingly, people should attach great importance to protect environment.
To sum up, the government should take keeping balance between ecology and economic benefits into consideration and enhance people's awareness to protect our environment during their journey. So do those, we may build up a harmonious society.
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
The cartoon indicated(用第三人称单数形式)that with the growing numbers of people spring up to the tourist spots, the environment in tourist attractions are polluted. For the strengths of development of tourism, the more visitors come to the scenic spots, the more financial benefit results they brings about to the government. For the shortcoming of it, unfortunately, the more tourists coming, the more seriously pollution they brings about to the nature. Accordingly, people should attach great importance to protect environment. To sum up, the government should take keeping balance between ecology and economic benefits into consideration and enhance people's awareness to protect our environment during their journey. So do those, we may build up a harmonious society.点评:18分写的很不错,注意一下细节,加油!
As is vividly depicted in theportrayal, two tourists are going sight-seeing on asmall boatwhich is paddling by an elder. They laugh and cheer with an exciting mind. Meanwhile, they throw their rubbish into the lake. Furthermore, the lake has almost filled up with various of(去掉,various是形容词,可以直接修饰名词) rubbish, for instance, cans, plastic bags, fishes bones, bottles, banana skins, watermelon rinds and so on. And under the picture, there is an annotation which says: surplus of journey.
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