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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:50 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As  is vividly shown in the picture, two travelers are littering while  traveling on the lake. What is more, various trash is floating on the  water, which spoils the beautiful scenery and exerts negative influence  on the ecological environment.
This cartoon, undoubtedly, reflects a thought-provoking phenomenon, that  owing to the low level of morality of some people, our environment is  suffering great destruction. When going touring, people tend to litter  about considering their pleasure and convenience selfishly, which will  arouse indignation among the local people and many others.
In my point of view, this kind of behaviour is definitely unacceptable  morally. As Confucius, the great Chinese philosopher said, "Do what your  would be done by". It is beyond dispute that no one can spoil the  public scenery and environment on their own account, since everyone will  be angry to see such kind of behaviour done in their hometown. I think  it is necessary to launch a nation-wide campaign to reveal and correct  this immoral trend, so that people in our society will enhance their  awareness of both morality and environment protection.
考研英语作文批改点评如下:

  As is vividly shown in the picture, two travelers are littering while traveling on the lake. What is more, various trash is(trash做可数名词,用复数)floating on the water, which spoils(问题同上) the beautiful scenery and exerts negative influence on the ecological environment.
This cartoon, undoubtedly, reflects a thought-provoking phenomenon, that  owing to the low level of morality of some people, our environment is  suffering great destruction. When going touring, people tend to litter  about considering their pleasure and convenience selfishly, which will  arouse indignation among the local people and many others.
In my point of view, this kind of behaviour is definitely unacceptable  morally. As Confucius, the great Chinese philosopher said, "Do what your(作主语,应该用主格)  would be done by". It is beyond dispute that no one can spoil the  public scenery and environment on their own account, since everyone will  be angry to see such kind of behaviour done in their hometown. I think  it is necessary to launch a nation-wide campaign to reveal and correct  this immoral trend, so that people in our society will enhance their  awareness of both morality and environment protection.点评:13-14分第二段的内容有点少。第三段的内容相对冗长。按照题目要求,适当的做出调整。
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