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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:46 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As  is vividly portrayed in the cartoon, a boring scene appears before our  eyes. In spite of the lake is seriously polluted, two tourist are  enjoying sightseeing while littering. The lake is dotted with a  critical mass of garbage, such as plastic bags, banana peel, bottles,  tins, fish-bones and son on. As the caption reads “ ‘after’ the travel” . There is no denying that the cartoonist aims at reminding us the grave problem that a large number of visitors lack theenvironmental awareness during traveling times.  On the one hand, the development of economy boosts the need of travel  and in turn, of course, tourism increases people’s income. On the other  hand, we can never ignore the fact that the environment of tourist  attraction suffers grave destruction. Just like the cartoon shows, with a  huge number of travelers rush into scenic spots, thousands of rubbish  are made and discarded, which made the environment seriously polluted.Not only has this situation influenced our own generation but they will influence generations to come.   It is imperative for us to take drastic measures. For one thing,  relevant laws and regulations should be made to fine those who are  littering ordo other uncivilized behaviors. For another, we should  cultivate the awareness of the citizens that the protection of  environment in the process of traveling is significant. Only in this way  can we curb the current phenomenon revealed in the picture.

考研英语作文批改点评如下:
     As is vividly portrayed in the cartoon, a boring scene appears before our eyes. In spite of the lake is seriously polluted, two tourist(应该用复数)  are enjoying sightseeing while littering. The lake is dotted with a  critical mass of garbage, such as plastic bags, banana peel, bottles,  tins, fish-bones and son(so) on. As the caption reads “‘after’ the travel” .
     There is no denying that the cartoonist aims at reminding us the grave problem that a large number of visitors lack theenvironmental(拼写错误)  awareness during traveling times. On the one hand, the development of  economy boosts the need of travel and in turn, of course, tourism  increases people’s  income. On the other hand, we can never ignore the fact that the  environment of tourist attraction suffers grave destruction. Just like  the cartoon shows, with a huge number of travelers rush(应该用-ing形式)  into scenic spots, thousands of rubbish are made and discarded, which  made the environment seriously polluted. Not only has this situation  influenced our own generation but they will influence generations to  come.   It is imperative for us to take drastic measures. For one thing,  relevant laws and regulations should be made to fine those who are  littering ordo other uncivilized behaviors. For another, we should  cultivate the awareness of the citizens that the protection of  environment in the process of traveling is significant. Only in this way  can we curb the current phenomenon revealed in the picture.点评:17分适当简化,不要超出字数太多。
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