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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:43 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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The set of drawing above vividly depicts three men on a ship. It seems that the two people who on the bottom of the ship are the visitors. They have enjoyed some beautiful views, and left some rubbish. Through the pictures we can see many plastic, fish bones, and other polluted sources. In the new century, the strength of our society economic has grown, however the environment of our planet become worse and worse.
    From the pictures we know that we should pay more attention to the environment. There are only one scenic spots and two people in the cartoon; however, the problems have happened everywhere in fact. In many places, there aren’t enough rubbish cabins or other equipment which can collect the garbage around the scenic spots. And people have enjoyed the beautiful scenery yet ignore the surroundings. So when you view the scenery you would better take good care of the earth.>>
     To protect our environment is the duty of us. The relevant department should build more base equipment .And the tourists should focus on how to protect our environment. If we come together we should have a more beautiful world.
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
   
     The set of drawing above vividly depicts three men on a ship. It seems that the two people who on the bottom of the ship are the visitors. They have enjoyed some beautiful views, and left some rubbish. Through the pictures we can see many plastic, fish bones, and other polluted sources. In the new century, the strength of our society economic has grown, however the environment of our planet become worse and worse.
From the pictures(用单数,只有一张图片)we know that we should pay more attention to the environment. There are only one scenic spots(用单数,前边是only one)and two people in the cartoon; however, the problems have happened everywhere in fact. In many places, there aren’t enough rubbish cabins or other equipment which can collect the garbage around the scenic spots. And people have enjoyed the beautiful scenery yet ignore the surroundings. So when you view the scenery you would better take good care of the earth.
To protect our environment is the duty of us. The relevant department should build more base equipment .And the tourists should focus on how to protect our environment. If we come together we should have a more beautiful world. 点评:15-16分思路是对的,第一段的最后一句话建议写在第二段,每段的内容题目要求中已经做出规定。同时建议第二段调整一下语言,让你的表达更有深度。
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