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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:41 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As we can see from this cartoon.There is a couple sitting in the boat over a lake.It may seem much more harmonious if we can't see any rubbish surrounded with the boat.What's more,it is easy to find that both of them are also making contribution to the pollution. It's a pity that this phenomenon isn't alone.
     Pollution in travelling has been a hot problem for a long time.I think it could owe to two main reason.For the external side,it is so unconvenient for the people to throw the litter,that the leave them anywhere.And for the internal side,the tourists haven't awared that they have the liability to keep the travelled place clean.
     So it is urgent for us to appeal the people to protect the environment.First we can add more bins along the way during the journey.Second make some rules that may help to keep people from polluting the interesting place.The last,which may be the most important,to help tourist improve their level of conception.
     After followall above,I think,wewill make our world more harmony.
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
As we can see from this cartoon.(这不是一句完整的话,要把句号改为逗号) There is a couple sitting in the boat over a lake. It may seem much more harmonious if we can't see any rubbish surrounded(应该用surrounding) with the boat. What's more, it is easy to find that both of them are also making contribution to the pollution. It's a pity that this phenomenon isn't alone. Pollution in travelling has been a hot problem for a long time. I think it could owe to two main reason(用复数). For the external side, it is so unconvenient(拼写错误) for the people to throw the litter, that the leave them anywhere(这里表达的不清楚). And for the internal side, the tourists haven't awared(拼写错误) that they have the liability to keep the travelled place clean. So it is urgent for us to appeal the people to protect the environment. First we can add more bins along the way during the journey. Second make some rules that may help to keep people from polluting the interesting place(用复数). The last, which may be the most important,(没有主语) to help tourist improve their level of conception. After follow(应该用动名词)all above, I think, wewill make our world more harmony.点评:12分要写三段式,每段的内容已经在题目中做出清楚的要求。
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