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    It's vividly describe in the picture that two students are throwing something into the lake while they enjoying a good time on a boat.But many rubbishes are floating on the lake.As a result of the pollution of these rubbishes,many fish died,the surface of the lake became black.
    The symbolic meaning of the picture is that we must protect the environment. Now some place,for example hill,lake,river,sea and so on,are exploited for traveling spots.They can largely increased the national income and also bring much diaster to the environment. Environment is one of these.As what you can see in the picture,many fish died,the water became black and maybe has poisoned.Today environment pollution is a serious problem for human.We can't ignore it.
    To sum up,we must protect our environment as protect our family. Protect environment is a responsibility for everyone today.
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　It's vividly describe（用过去分词） in the picture that two students are throwing something into the lake while they （加are）enjoying a good time on a boat. But many rubbishes are（rubbish是不可数名词） floating on the lake. As a result of the pollution of these rubbishes, many fish died, the surface of the lake became black.    The symbolic meaning of the picture is that we must protect the environment. Now some place（用复数）, for example hill, lake, river, sea and so on, are exploited for traveling spots. They can largely increased the national income and also bring much diaster（拼写错误） to the environment. Environment is one of these（指代不明）. As what you can see in the picture, many fish died, the water became black（避免累述） and maybe has poisoned. Today environment pollution is a serious problem for human. We can't ignore it.    To sum up, we must protect our environment as protect（前面的as是介词，这里用动名词） our family. Protect（作主语部分，用动名词） environment is a responsibility for everyone today.点评：7分这篇作文的主题是旅游与环保，作文要扣题。考研作文要写够160词。