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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:14 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As we can see in the picture, two personssitting on the boat, they are talking and eating continuously, and the womanthrows the rubbishes into the lake. There are quite a lot of litters on the surface of the lake, such as dead fish, bottles, left food-boxes and so on.
This picture does reflect a thought-provoking social phenomenon which is not uncommon in China now. People oftenthrow lots of rubbishes when they are travelling. This is a bad thing. To begin with, water is one of the most valuable resources, if we pollute water arbitrarily, we would have no water to drink in the future. What a horrible thing! In addition, the park which is polluted by us will become not beautiful, so we cannot feel happy when we are playing in it.
In my opinion, we should solve this problem soon with the help of all kinds of good measures. It is necessary for us to enhance thesense of protecting environment and water. We should bear in mind that earth is our hometown. Everyone should value the common hometown of ushuman. Only in this way can we have a better life and only in this way can our world become more harmonious to live in.
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As we can see in the picture, two personssitting on the boat,(加连词and)they are talking and eating continuously, and the womanthrows the rubbishes into the lake. There are quite a lot of litters on the surface of the lake, such as dead fish, bottles, left food-boxes and so on.
This picture does reflect a thought-provoking social phenomenon which is notuncommon in China now. People oftenthrow lots of rubbishes when they are travelling. This is a bad thing. To begin with, water is one of the most valuable resources, if we pollute waterarbitrarily, we would have no water to drink in the future. What a horrible thing! In addition, the park which is polluted by us will become not beautiful, so we cannot feel happy when we are playing in it.
In my opinion, we should solve this problem soon with the help of all kinds of good measures. It is necessary for us to enhance thesense of protecting environment and water. We should bear in mind that earth is our hometown. Everyone should value the common hometown of ushuman. Only in this way can we have a better life and only in this way can our world become more harmonious to live in.点评:8分第二段写的不太好,应该是写这幅图片想要揭示的内容,第三段跑题,你的内容中没有涉及到旅游景点保护的问题。
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