考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(565)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or madam, As I want to agency propolis and fresh royal jelly by your enterprise product with due consideration of the good reputation of your enterprise and the high quality of your product.I am writing to askacting on specific conditions.
     Firstly,plese give me particular accounts as product name,product standard,product price,Secondly,I also need to know the terms of payment and after-sell service,Thirdly,I wonderwhat way deliver these product? Furthly,howmuch money for agency your enterprise product.
     I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my requests. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
     Sincerely yours,
      LiMing
   
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or madam, As（去掉as，否则这不是一句完整的话） I am（去掉）want to agency（这是个名词，这里要用一个动词）propolis（拼写错误） product and fresh royal jelly by your enterprise product with due consideration of the good reputation of your enterprise and the high quality of your product. I am writing to askacting on specific conditions. Firstly, plese（拼写错误） give me particular accounts as product name, product standard, product price, （改成句号） Secondly, I also need to know the terms of payment and after-sell service,（改成句号） Thirdly, I wonderwhat（改成in which） way（加不定式to） deliver these product?（这是个陈述句，用句号） Furthly（拼写错误）, howmuch money for agency（这是个名词，后面不能加宾语） your enterprise product. I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my requests. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely yours,  LiMing点评：5分模板内容用的太多，但是错误也很多。