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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As is illustrated in the picture, two visitors are touring on the lake and a person is driving the boat.While enjoying the beautiful scene around, this two peopleare also creating a nasty view for thecoming visitors . They throw away the waste and let the bottles andpaper floating on the clean lake.
     We can obviously figure out the intention which the author wants to tell us. That is. The emergency of protecting evironment is the duty and reality for us.As soon as we continue to pollute the scene,throw away waste freely, wewill destroy our only living place-earth planet. Therefore, we wil never have the terrific view as before.Realize that we are not the unique creature in the world can help us to correct the faulty behaviour.
     I appeal to our authority organization to take action in order to solve this problem.With the formal lawwe can prohibite the behaviour and prevent the environment from pollution.Also, it can be a good complementaion in the condition that we teach our children and encourage the youngers on the serious consequence if we donot care about our living place.The earth needs our attention and if we want a bright and constant future,please, restrict your behaviour and give more cares.
   
   
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
   
As illustrated in the picture, two visitors are touring on the lake and a person is driving the boat. While enjoying the beautiful scene around, this two peopleare also creating a nasty view for thecoming visitors. They throw away the waste and let the bottles andpaper floating on the clean lake.(对图片中的描述不完整,游客们扔了很多垃圾到湖中,不仅仅是这两位游客的行为) We can obviously figure out the intention which the author wants to tell us. That is.(不能作为一句话)The emergency of protecting evironment(拼写错误) is the duty and reality for us. As soon as we continue to pollute the scene,(改成or) throw away waste freely, wewill destroy our only living place-earth planet. Therefore, we wil(will)never have the terrific view as before. Realize(应该用动名词)that we are not the unique creature in the world can help us to correct the faulty behaviour. I appeal to our authority organization to take action in order to solve this problem. With the formal lawwe can prohibite(拼写错误) the behaviour and prevent the environment from pollution. Also, it can be a good complementaion(拼写错误) in the condition that we teach our children and encourage the youngers(拼写错误)on the serious consequence if we donot(拼写错误) care about our living place. The earth needs our attention and if we want a bright and constant future, please, restrict your behaviour and give more cares.点评:4分写跑题了,这篇作文的主题是旅游与环境。要提高你的语言组织能力。
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