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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:04 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As we can see from the portrayal above, there are two sightseers traveling on a boat while littering rubbish into the lake, which is already full of trash, such as bottles, food containers, bones, watermelon rind, cans, and so on. Under this picture is a caption: after the travel or leftovers in the travel.  The picture subtly reveals a thought-provoking phenomenon that, while tourism is booming widely, the environment is suffering a great destruction. Obviously, tourism serves as a double-edged sword to our life. On the one hand, we know that travel business dose much in promoting economy of a country. Meanwhile, it enriches our life as well. On the other hand, the negative point , which we hardly shrug off, is that the tourism extremely influence our living environment——polluted water, disturbed ecological balance and excessively used natural resources.
     Now something drastic must be done to protect the environment. Firstly, governments should make up more strict policies to restrain the tourists. Secondly, it is high time that we enhanced the awareness of people that environmental protection is vital to us.
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下:

As we can see from the portrayal above, there are two sightseers traveling on a boat while littering rubbish into the lake, which is already full of trash, such as bottles, food containers, bones, watermelon rind(用复数), cans, and so on. 【Under this picture is a caption: after the travel or leftovers in the travel.】(这幅画中没有这句话) The picture subtly reveals a thought-provoking phenomenon that, while tourism is booming widely, the environment is suffering a great destruction. Obviously, tourism serves as a double-edged sword to our life. On the one hand, we know that travel business dose much in promoting economy of a country. Meanwhile, it enriches our life as well. On the other hand, the negative point , which we hardly shrug off, is that the tourism extremely influence our living environment——polluted water, disturbed ecological balance and excessively used natural resources.(这句话中的三个动词应该用动名词形式) Now something drastic must be done to protect the environment. Firstly, governments should make up more strict policies to restrain the tourists. Secondly, it is high time that we enhanced the awareness of people that environmental protection is vital to us.点评:17分写的很不错。注意以上的几个细节。
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