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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:04 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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This cartoon vividly depicts that two tourists are on a boat of lake.It informs us that one of them is discarding rubbish in the lake. Some of the rubbish flow on the lake, such as fishing-bone, bottles, watermelon skin, banana peel, plastic box and so on. The caption indicates that “The Leftovers of the Journey”.
    Undoubtedly,the cartoonist aims at due attention has to be paid to the environment's issue.Journey is set to become an essential feature to modern life, therefore, it comes no surprise that a vast majority of people favor it. But with the growing numbers of people traveling the nature scenic spots, our environment will suffer drastic destructions.
     Personally,I believe that we human should take some drastic measures.First and formost,we should enhance people's awareness that the environment is crucial to us.Otherewise,people will suffering from environment bring pains at last.Moreover,we should appeal to our authorities to make a series of strict laws to control this behavior.On the whole,no matter where you are going or traveling,you must bear in mind that environment is indispensable to us.
   
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
   
This cartoon vividly depicts that two tourists are on a boat of lake. It informs us that one of them is discarding rubbish in the lake. Some of the rubbish flow on the lake, such as fishing-bone(fish bones), bottles, watermelon skin(建议用复数), banana peel(建议用复数), plastic box(建议用复数) and so on. The caption indicates that “The Leftovers of the Journey”. Undoubtedly, the cartoonist aims at due attention has to be paid to the environment's(直接用environment就可以) issue. Journey is set to become an essential feature to modern life, therefore, it comes no surprise that a vast majority of people favor it. But with the growing numbers of people traveling the nature scenic spots, our environment will suffer drastic destructions.  Personally, I believe that we human should take some drastic measures. First and formost(拼写错误), we should enhance people's awareness that the environment is crucial to us. Otherewise(拼写错误), people will suffering(will后用动词原形) from environment bring pains at last. Moreover, we should appeal to our authorities to make a series of strict laws to control this behavior. On the whole, no matter where you are going or traveling, you must bear in mind that environment is indispensable to us.点评:16分写的还可以,写的时候再认真一点。第二段可以适当的多一点内容。同学可以参考一下真题范文。
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