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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:01 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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As we can see from the picture,a boat is floating in the river, two men are sitting in the boat and throwing litters into the river, which makes the polluted river more disgusting and can not be seen any more. Unbelievable, the boatman has no reaction for the behavior of them.
    The picture makes heavy looking for me who have, so far, had no attention about the phenomenon. With the rapid development of the society, people are caring more about personal benefits and ignoring our public environment naturally. According to the recent survey conducted by China Daily, thousands of rivers are polluted by human beings. Dr. Wang, a famous sociologist professor appeals that we can not keep destroying the environment, without exaggeration, the day will come if we don’t take action rapidly.
    There is no denying the fact that the environment is significant for us absolutely. We should move, we should take action instantly. Firstly, we must take the problem of environment seriously. Secondly, not only appeal others to keep the environment but also we must protect it by ourselves. Last but not the least, the administration should take legislative initiative. Only in this way, our environment would be better and better.
   
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
     As we can see from the picture,a boat is floating in(用介词on)the river, two men are sitting in the boat and throwing litters into the river, which makes the polluted river more disgusting and can not be seen(这个表达的意思是不能被看到)any more. Unbelievable, the boatman has no reaction for the behavior of them.
The picture makes heavy looking for me who have, so far, had no attention about the phenomenon. With the rapid development of the society, people are caring more about personal benefits and ignoring our public environment naturally. According to the recent survey conducted by China Daily, thousands of rivers are polluted by human beings. Dr. Wang, a famous sociologist professor appeals that we can not keep destroying the environment, without exaggeration, the day will come if we don’t take action rapidly. There is no denying the fact that the environment is significant for us absolutely. We should move,(缺少连词) we should take action instantly. Firstly, we must take the problem of environment seriously. Secondly, not only appeal others to keep the environment but also we must protect itby ourselves. Last but not the least, the administration should take legislative initiative. Only in this way, our environment would be better and better(这个句子应该用倒装).点评:5分写跑题了,这篇作文的主题是旅游景点的保护。
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