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发表于 2017-8-6 14:10:00 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
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In the vivid picture, there are both of visitors to appreciate the scenery freely on the boat, along with an old fisher. One of the both, a man, is reading the newspaper, yet the another, a woman, is throwing off a banana peel in the river. Obviously, around the boat, there is mounting number of trashes in river, such as fruit peel, plastic bags, plastic bottle, used cans of food and fish bones and so forth. The picture means that protecting environment is considered more important thing in our society and more necessary action to individuals in our life.
Only when the environment is protect by general public in good way, can better make use of. I can exemplify the conclusion with Alleviation the flood of Yellow River. Though the flood of Yellow River was server in remote age, now, it has alleviated by our authority and citizens who planted thousands of tresses and forest on the sides of the Yellow River in the last decades. This is the duty to protect the environment. Seeing how excited the people there are when they witness the change by themselves, they can now how much their efforts to protect the environment are cherished.
They best way to show accepting the duty to environment, in my opinion, is to follow the above mentioned example by protecting environment and our homeland anytime and anywhere. Therefore, to build a more harmonious society between human beings and the nature, we should do our best to protect our environment and cherish the natural resources on the Earth.
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
   
In the vivid picture, there are both of(用two比较好) visitors to appreciate(这里应该用-ing形式) the scenery freely on the boat, along with an old fisher(是船夫,不是渔夫). One of the both, a man, is reading the newspaper, yet the another(应该用other), a woman, is throwing off a banana peel in(into) the river. Obviously, around the boat, there is mounting number of trashes in river, such as fruit peel(建议用复数), plastic bags, plastic bottle(建议用复数), used cans of food and fish bones and so forth. The picture means that protecting environment is considered (加as a)more important thing in our society and more necessary action to individuals in our life. Only when the environment is protect by general public in good way, can(缺少主语) better make use of. I can exemplify the conclusion with Alleviation the flood of Yellow River. Though the flood of Yellow River was server in remote age, now, it has alleviated by our authority and citizens who planted thousands of tresses and forest on the sides of the Yellow River in the last decades. This is the duty to protect the environment. Seeing how excited the people there are when they witness the change by themselves, they can now how much their efforts to protect the environment are cherished. They best way to show accepting the duty to environment, in my opinion, is to follow the above mentioned example by protecting environment and our homeland anytime and anywhere. Therefore, to build a more harmonious society between human beings and the nature, we should do our best to protect our environment and cherish the natural resources on the Earth. 点评:3分字数最好控制在200词以内。没有把握好主题,这篇作文应该是写旅游景点的保护。每段的内容要按照题目要求写。
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