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Dear Bob,
I am writing this letter to apologize for the absence of your birthday party.I am grateful to be invited your home to take part in your famliy banquet.
The reason why I did not come in is my mother was ill,nobody can help her go to hospital except me.I also need to cook mealseverydayfor my mother when I after school.In addtion,My father will come back home next week from USA for business.
Please accept me to say sorry again.
yours sincerely,
LiMing
   
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Bob,
I am writing this letter to apologize for the absence of your birthday party. I am grateful to be invited your home to take part in your famliy banquet.
The reason why I did not come in is（加that，这里的that不能省略） my mother was ill,（加连词） nobody can help her go to hospital except me. I also need to cook mealseverydayfor my mother when I（去掉） after school. In addtion（拼写错误）, My father will come back home next week from USA for business.
Please accept me to say sorry again.
yours（Yours） sincerely,
LiMing 点评：6分字数不够，要注意细节处。最后一段最好再加一句话。