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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Bob:
    I'm writing this letter to inform you thatI feel terribly sorry for the inconveniece I caused.
    First of all,I'm appreciate your kindness to me.As a foreigner in Canada,I always have l lot of difficults in life and study,you are the best friend who can give a hand to me.Within those days,I became more confidence in many fields with your help.Secondly,I feel really sorry for the accident.It was the time that I opended my package I realize that I haven't return to you the CD you lent to me last week.I have repacked and sent the CD to you by Express Delivery.
    There is my suggestion.Set a public area where we can put our favorable books and CDs so that we can enjoy more fun with each other and avoid such thing happened again.Apologize again for the mistake I have made.
    Your sincerely
    Li Ming
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Bob
: （英语中用逗号）    I'm writing this letter to inform you thatI feel terribly sorry for the inconveniece（拼写错误） I caused.    First of all, I'm appreciate（注意前面有am，这里应该用-ed形式） your kindness to me. As a foreigner in Canada, I always have l lot of difficults（拼写错误） in life and study, you are the best friend who can give a hand to me. Within those days, I became more confidence in many fields with your help. Secondly, I feel really sorry for the accident. It was the time that I opended（拼写错误） my package I realize（应该用过去时） that I haven't（应该用过去时） return to you the CD you lent to me last week. I have repacked and sent the CD to you by Express Delivery.    There is my suggestion. Set a public area where we can put our favorable books and CDs so that we can enjoy more fun with each other and avoid such thing happened again. Apologize again for the mistake I have made.Your sincerely（加逗号）Li Ming点评：基本是对范文的仿写，结构上不是很好，建议仔细的分析一下范文的结构。如果第一段没有说出为什么道歉，第二段一开头也要说出。