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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Bob,
     I am writing this letter to apologize that I could not attend to your graduation ceremony on the 31st instant. Had I payed more attention to my plans, I would not have made such a stupid mistake.
     The primary factors for my absence are as follows. First and foremost, I will have to take part in a Chinese-speaking Contest held in my university on that day. Therefore, I could not be there with you and enjoy the great pleasure it brings about. In addition, I also need to take the English test in the afternoon. Last but not least, if I take all the factors into due consideration in advance, I would be able to spare my time for you.
     I really hope you will accept my sincere apology. Wish you enjoy the wonderful time.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Bob, I am writing this letter to apologize that I could not attend to your graduation ceremony on the 31st instant（应该使用副词）. Had I payed（改成paid） more attention to my plans, I would not have made such a stupid mistake. The primary factors for my absence are as follows. First and foremost（不建议用这些字数多的连词）, I will have to take part in a Chinese-speaking Contest held in my university on that day. Therefore, I could not be there with you and enjoy the great pleasure it brings about. In addition, I also need to take the English test in the afternoon. Last but not least（不建议用这些字数多的连词）, if I take all the factors into due consideration in advance, I would be able to spare my time for you. I really hope you will accept my sincere apology. Wish you enjoy the wonderful time.Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评：6分既然字数已经超出了，就不要用那些占字比较多的连词了。建议第一段说明这是道歉信，第二段说明为什么道歉等原因。具体内容请参考范文。