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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Bob,
I'm Ling Ming.I'm writing this letter to apologize for the last time I didn't inform you to go to Lucy's birthday party.
     I feel awfully sorry about it and want you to know what happended.Last Sunday.was Lucy's birthday.She wanted I inform you to go to her birthday party.But because I was too busy to forget it.I had already explain for Lucy why you didn't come.I hope you can forgive my careless and absent-mind.
    Please allow me to say sorry again.I will want to your reply in letter and your forgiveness.
Your sincerely,
LiMing
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Bob,
I'm Ling Ming. I'm writing this letter to apologize for the last time I didn't inform you to go to Lucy's birthday party. I feel awfully sorry about it and want you to know what happended（拼写错误）. Last Sunday.（去掉） was Lucy's birthday. She wanted I inform you to go to her birthday party.（建议改成逗号与后面的话连成一句话） But because（去掉） I was too busy to forget it. I had already explain（用过去分词） for Lucy why you didn't come. I hope you can forgive my careless and absent-mind.Please allow me to say sorry again. I will want（改成look forward 比较好） to your reply in letter and your forgiveness.
Your（Yours） sincerely,
LiMing（落款位于右下角）2011,11th,December（日期可以去掉，一般不用谢日期，况且你的格式不对，前两篇作文也一样）点评：6-7分写的还是不错的，就是错误比较多，一定要注意了。