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考研英语待批改作文：
    Dear Bob,
    I am writing to make an apology for you for I broke your vase which is your parents gave you as your birthday gift.It never occurred to me that this will be happen. I am sorry for my carelessness.
    I have the following ways to solve this problem.Firstly, I know that the vase was made in Jingde town,and I will go to there next week for trip.How about I buy a similar one for you? Secondly,I want to compensate for the vase by offering cash.
    If there are any other solutions you like , please let me kown. Looking forward to your reply.
    Your sincerely,
    LiMing
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Bob,
I am writing to make an apology for（用介词to） you for I broke your vase which is your parents gave you as your birthday gift（从句中有两个谓语动词，逻辑比较混乱）. It never occurred to me that this will be happen. I am sorry for my carelessness. I have the following ways to solve this problem. Firstly, I know that the vase was made in Jingde town, and I will go to there（there是个副词，前面不用介词） next week for（加不定冠词a） trip. How about I buy a similar one for you? Secondly, I want to compensate for the vase by offering cash. If there are any other solutions you like , please let me kown（用动词原形）. Looking forward to your reply.Your sincerely, LiMing点评：6分最后一段最好重申歉意。建议看一下范文的结构，分析一下可以优化的地方。