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Dear sir or madam，
     As I am a student from the art design of department of Tianjing univesity.According to you advertise that your want to employ a designer for you company.I want to become your designer.
     I believe I will become a outstanding desinger.Frist and foremost, I am good at art design and I have a number of experiences for this work. In addition, I have a good ability of communication and Ican quickly eastblish rappot with people of all ages. Last but not least, I pay attition to the spirit of teamwork and I hope that I can work at your company.
     I would like to gratitued for your consider my request at you earlist convenience.I look forward to your reply as soon as possible.
     Yours sincerely，
     li Ming
   
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear sir or madam（Sir or Madam）， As I am a student from the art design of department of Tianjing univesity（具体的大学，首字母大写，注意要拼写对）.（这不是一句完整的话，要引起注意！） According to you advertise that your（做主语用you） want to employ a designer for you（应该用所有格your） company. I want to become your designer. I believe I will become a（应该用an） outstanding desinger（拼写错误）. Frist（拼写错误） and foremost, I am good at art design and I have a number of experiences for this work. In addition, I have a good ability of communication and I can quickly eastblish rappot（拼写错误） with people of all ages. Last but not least, I pay attition（拼写错误） to the spirit of teamwork and I hope that I can work at your company. I would like to gratitued（拼写错误） for your consider my request at you earlist（拼写错误） convenience. I look forward to your reply as soon as possible. Yours sincerely， li Ming点评：5分拼写错误太多，模板化严重。求职信要写与你申请的职位关系最大的方面，不要把学历和工作经验一句话带过而写其他不是最重要的方面。