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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
   
     I am a student who major in clinical science with a great enthusiasm and interest inthevolunteers wanted on the webpage which needs some students who have the basic clinical knowledge to do some experiment.I am writing a letter in purpose of consulting several questions about itto you.
   
     First and foremost ,I would like to know the exact time management for the sake of not influencing my regular college curriculum . Secondly, I wonder what kind of the basic clinical experience and knowledge is needed about the researching. Finally , whether the reference media you mentioned should beprepared by ourselves.
   
     I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my questions. I look forward to your reply .
   
      Yours sincerely,
   
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, 【I am a studentwho major（先行词是student，这里用majors） in clinical science with a great enthusiasm and interest inthevolunteers wanted on the webpage which needs some students who have the basic clinical knowledge to do some experiment.】（这个长句你把握的不是很好，建议拆成两个句子） I am writing a letter in purpose of consulting several questions about itto you（建议去掉）.  First and foremost, I would like to know the exact time management for the sake of not influencing my regular college curriculum. Secondly, I wonder what kind of the basic clinical experience and knowledge is needed about the researching. Finally, whether the reference media you mentioned should beprepared by ourselves.（这是个问句） I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my questions. I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Ming（落款位于右下角）点评：6分字数超了。第一段可以简洁一些。