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Dear sir or madam, I ordered the mobile phone called xiaomi a month ago, but haven’t received it now. I’m writing to see if you can provide me with information regarding the following aspects.First of all, what concerned me is that how many telephones have you produced now. Second, I want to know the plan of selling, so I will know when I will receive it. At last, what measures do you take to protect the right of consumers from the fake commodities.  I’m looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.Sincerely yours Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear sir or madam（Sir or Madam）, I ordered the mobile phone called xiaomi（名字首字母是要大写的）a month ago, but haven’t received it now. I’m writing to see if you can provide me with information regarding the following aspects.First of all, what concerned me is that how many telephones have you produced now. Second, I want to know the plan of selling, so I will know when I will receive it. At last, what measures do you take to protect the right of consumers from the fake commodities.（这是个问句，要用问号） I’m looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.Sincerely yours（加逗号） Li Ming点评：6-7分错误比较少。第二段的问询部分，例如第一个问题你们生产了多少部手机，感觉这样的问题不是很好。