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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam ,
    I am a new student who arrives in the university in September . I am writing to you about inquiring of how to join in the Red Cross Association and become a volunteer member of it .
    I know the Red Cross Association is a charitable and rescuing organization which helps patients all over the world and send love and hope to those who are in hopeless situation .So I want to know if I want to be a volunteer ,which information I should send to you and whether age or educational background limit or not . What’s more , I hope you can tell me what characters a volunteer should have as a member of the Red Cross Association . Also ,I want to know the way how to select volunteers .At last ,I want to realize the duty and responsibility of a volunteer member .
    Thank you for reading my letter and looking forward to your reply .
    Yours sincerely ,
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam,I am a new student who arrives in the university in September. I am writing to you about inquiring of how to join in the Red Cross Association and become a volunteer member of it.【I know the Red Cross Association is a charitable and rescuing organization which helps patients all over the world and send love and hope to those who are in hopeless situation .】（这些内容跟问询没关系）So I want to know if I want to be a volunteer ,which information I should send to you and whether age or educational background limit or not . What’s more , I hope you can tell me what characters a volunteer should have as a member of the Red Cross Association . Also ,I want to know the way how to select volunteers .At last ,I want to realize the duty and responsibility of a volunteer member .Thank you for reading my letter and looking forward to your reply . Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：5-6分超出字数太多了，其实写的还是可以的，把该去掉的内容去掉。