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Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am writing to ask for information about your agency´s Hong Kong travel packages for the spring festival.My family and I plan to travel there.Therefore, I would be grateful if you could supply me with the following informations.
     To begin with,we would like to visit most of the scenic spots and shopping centers.Moreover,a DIY program would be perferable,it would like to extend my greatest appreciation if you could provide us with yourtravel packages and their corresponding averager price ,covering both hotel and a return ticket.
     Thank you for your time and consideration,looking forword to your reply.
     Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask for information about your agency´s Hong Kong travel packages for the spring festival. My family and I plan to travel there. Therefore, I would be grateful if you could supply me with the following informations（information是不可数名词）. To begin with, we would like to visit most of the scenic spots and shopping centers. Moreover, a DIY program would be perferable,（加连词and） it would like to extend my greatest appreciation if you could provide us with yourtravel packages and their corresponding averager（拼写错误） price ,covering both hotel and a return ticket. Thank you for your time and consideration, looking forword（拼写错误） to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：7分写的还是很不错的，就是拼写错误比较多，尽量少用模板的内容。