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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a senior from Shenyang Aerospace University. I am writing the letter in purpose of applying for an opportunity of practice in your company.And I would be much grateful if you could provide me somebasic information.
     Firstly, I am capable of practicing work about aircraft engineering,but I wish to inquire what qualifications one needs for acceptance? Secondly, please give me some good message as regards accommodation and working conditions.Thirdly, would you please sendan application formto my mailbox 631245@Sina.com.
    My appreciation to you for your generous help is beyond words. I look forward to a favorable reply at your earliest convenience.
     Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a senior from Shenyang Aerospace University. I am writing the letter in purpose of applying for an opportunity of practice in your company. And I would be much grateful if you could provide me somebasic information. Firstly, I am capable of practicing work about aircraft engineering, but I wish to inquire what qualifications one needs for acceptance?（这是个陈述句）Secondly, please give me some good message（用复数）as regards accommodation and working conditions.Thirdly, would you please sendan application formto my mailbox 631245@Sina.com.My appreciation to you for your generous help is beyond words. I look forward to a favorable reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评：8-9分写的非常不错。建议第二段的问询中至少一个用问句。