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Dear president of Students’ union,
     As a freshman of Hunan University of Science and Technology,I’m very confused about the question:which club or activity should I participate in? Posters about various kinds of clubs and activities can be seen in our university,such as the English Club,the Ping-pong Club,the Speech Association and so on.It is difficult for me to make a choice among all the clubs and associations.I hope you can give me some suggestions about taking part in clubs and activities.
     I’ll appreciate a lot if you can provide some informations for me.I’m looking forward to your reply at your earlist convenience.
     Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
    Dear President of Students’ Union,
     As a freshman, I am very glad to hear that chubs and community are about to recruit new members this weekend. And I wonder if you can offer some suggestions on which concerns me most as follow.
    Firstly, I’d like to enjoy a various and varied extra-curriculum life as well as keep my duty on study. Will there be much confliction of time arrangement between after-class activities and study? Secondly, it will be highly appreciated if you could offer me more information on each club.
    Thank you so much for you favorable concern on my questions, and looking forward to your
Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear president of Students’ union, As a freshman of Hunan University of Science and Technology, I’m very confused about the question: which club or activity should I participate in? Posters about various kinds of clubs and activities can be seen in our university, such as the English Club, the Ping-pong Club, the Speech Association and so on. It is difficult for me to make a choice among all the clubs and associations. I hope you can give me some suggestions about taking part in clubs and activities. I’ll appreciate a lot if you can provide some informations（information是不可数名词） for me. I’m looking forward to your reply at your earlist（拼写错误） convenience. Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：不建议这样写询问信，建议使用三段式。第一段说明自己的来信目的，第二段分条提出自己的问题（例如学校有哪些种类的社团；我对XX感兴趣，有没有这方面的社团；社团一般都是什么时间开展活动…），第三段结尾。Dear President of Students’ Union, As a freshman, I am very glad to hear that chubs and community are about to recruit new members this weekend. And I wonder if you can offer some suggestions on which concerns me most as follow.Firstly, I’d like to enjoy a various and varied extra-curriculum life as well as keep my duty on study. Will there be much confliction of time arrangement between after-class activities and study? Secondly, it will be highly appreciated if you could offer me more information on each club.Thank you so much for you favorable concern on my questions, and looking forward to your（加reply）.  Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：6-7分思路是正确的，第二段写的不是很好。建议写三个问题，每个问题简洁提问，问题一定要简明。