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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing for the information about the details of some job applying information of your company. As a senior student, I am interested in your company.
Yesterday, I saw the job bulletin of your company on the website “51.job.com”. Founding the introduction conform my strength and previous preparation, I have put it into my consideration. But there are still something I want to know. If I could work here, how long would my position and salary get a raise normally? Besides, if there is a holiday per year or any other welfare for me?
I am really appreciate for your time. Looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing for the information about the details of some job applying information of your company. As a senior student, I am interested in your company. （两句话最好换一下位置，我对你们公司感兴趣，想询问一些信息）【Yesterday, I saw the job bulletin of your company on the website “51.job.com”. Founding the introduction conform my strength and previous preparation, I have put it into my consideration. 】But there are still something I want to know. If I could work here, how long would my position and salary get a raise normally? Besides, if there is a holiday per year or any other welfare for me? I am really appreciate（注意前边有be动词am，改成appreciated）for your time. Looking forward to your reply.Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：5-6分第二段【】部分可以一句话带过或者直接去掉，询问信重点是询问的部分。