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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a student of fudan university.I am wrriting the letter is purpose of enquiring some information about how to contribute clothes and books to the disaster area.
     First,I need to know the address that I can send the contribution by post . Second,I also want to know the student's living standard in the disaster area,in order to make ours efforts to help them.I trust that you can give me some advice on the case.
     I'd appreciate it if you can reach me at LiMing@sina.com to give me your suggestions.
     Yours faithfully
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a student of fudan university（具体的某所大学，首字母大写）. I am wrriting（拼写错误） the letter is purpose of enquiring some information about how to contribute clothes and books to the disaster area. First, I need to know the address that I can send the contribution by post . Second, I also want to know the student's living standard in the disaster area, in order to make ours（our就是我们的） efforts to help them. I trust that you can give me some advice on the case. I'd appreciate it if you can reach me at LiMing@sina.com to give me your suggestions. Yours faithfully（加逗号） Li Ming点评：7分第二段建议写三条询问的内容，两条会让人觉得有点补充分。注意单词的拼写。