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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Mr. H,
     I've read therequest about submitting personalinformationon your website. I'm writing to enquire details about this year's government scholarship.
     The most important question is how many levels of funding are provided. I major in foreign language studies and in the top 10%. I know that last year your center provided $1,000 per month on situations like me. So I wonder if the program this year can keep this level. Furthermore, could you provide information about XXX University which I'm most interested in? I've searched on the university's website but it didn't seem helpful.
     Looking forward to your reply and thank you for your patience.
     Sincerely
      Li Ming
   
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Mr. H, I've read therequest about submitting personalinformationon your website. I'm writing to enquire details about this year's government scholarship. The most important question is how many levels of funding are provided. I major in foreign language studies and in the top 10%. I know that last year your center provided $1,000 per month on situations like me（应该是提供给人，而不是提供给情况）. So I wonder if the program this year can keep this level. Furthermore, could you provide information about XXX University which I'm most interested in? I've searched on the university's website but it didn't seem helpful. Looking forward to your reply and thank you for your patience. Sincerely（一般用Yours sincerely，后面有逗号）  Li Ming(落款没找到右对齐功能）点评：5-6分错误比较少。但是第二段的furthermore部分，跟奖学金没关系。