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Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am a teacher in a middle shool.I want to organize some students to your town for the historical exhibition.I am writing to inquire about the following information.
     First of all, what is the size of exhibition, what is its theme and what will be displayed on it? Secondly , when it will be held and what is the opening time?
     I hope to bring over students to the exhibition.So I would like to inquire if there are student tickets and what is the discount.I am looking forward to your early replay .
    yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
   
   
Dear Sir or Madam,I am a teacher in a middle shool（拼写错误）.I want to organize some students to your town for the historical exhibition. I am writing to inquire about the following information. First of all, what is the size of（加定冠词the） exhibition, what is its theme and what will be displayed on it? Secondly, when it will be held and what is the opening time? 【I hope to bring over students to the exhibition. So I would like to inquire if there are student tickets and what is the discount.】（你第二段的内容不是很多，这一部分应该写在上一段） I am looking forward to your early replay .yours（Yours） sincerely, Li Ming （落款位于右下角）点评：6分适当调整一下内容和结构。第二段应该是问询的内容，第三段是感谢和期盼。模板用太多。