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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     Received the advertising information you sent to me and moved by the fame of your bookstore,I would like to inquire the details of some books.
     I am preparing for the examination for TOEFL,it is imperative to purchase books concerned such as gramar,vocabulary and former test paper,I wonder if you could provide me all the materials before July.Furthmore,I live in a remote area of your province,will you please deliver these reference books through post office?And I would pay for it by net.
     Thank you for your time,I am looking forward to your reply.
    Sincerely yours,
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, Received the advertising information you sent to me and moved by the fame of your bookstore, I would like to inquire the details of some books.  I am preparing for the examination for TOEFL,（缺少连词）it is imperative to purchase books concerned such as gramar（拼写错误）, vocabulary and former test paper, （缺少连词）I wonder if you could provide me all the materials before July. Furthmore（拼写错误）, I live in a remote area of your province, will you please deliver these reference books through post office? And I would pay for it by（通过用through the） net.  Thank you for your time, I am looking forward to your reply. Sincerely yours, Li Ming点评：7-8分写的不错，要注意单词的拼写和句子中连词的使用。