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Dear Sir or Madam,
      I ama sincere audience of movie and often spend my space time with my family comes tothe other cinema of yours.I am so happywhen I heard from my friend that you will be establishing a cinema at the XX Road. The reason why I am so happy is that it no far with my home. It is my great honor if you could answer my questions.
     To begin with, could you tell me the time about your opening day? Because a comedy movie to show next month. I wish I canwatch it in your cinema. Moreover, Will you take some preferential activity? It is near holiday, I have more time to go t o watching.
     Thank you for spend time on reading my letter. I am looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincere
Li Ming
Dear Sir or Madam,
  I ama sincere audience of movie and often spend my space time with my family comes（前面已经有这句话的谓语动词了，这里应该用非谓语动词） tothe other cinema of yours.I am so happywhen I heard（am 和heard的时态要保持一致） from my friend that you will be establishing（建议改成establish） a cinema at the XX Road. The reason why I am so happy is that it no far with（from）my home. It is my great honor if you could answer my questions. To begin with, could you tell me the time about your opening day? Because a comedy movie to show next month. I wish I canwatch it in your cinema. Moreover, Will（w小写）you take some preferential activity? It is near holiday, I have more time to go t o watching. Thank you for spend（介词后用动名词） time on reading my letter. I am looking forward to your reply.Yours sincere（用副词sincerely，后加逗号）
Li Ming点评：6分避免字数过长，尤其是第一段。简要的说明意图即可。
   
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