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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
    As I am planning to take part in the NETEM next January. I have decided to place an order of some essential books with due consideration of the good reputation of your store and high quality of your goods.
    Firstly, enclosed with this letter is a list which details these books of my requests. Secondly, I also need to know how to pay for the books. Thirdly, I wonder if it is convenient for you to deliver these books before November 1, 2011 to Peking University.
    I would like to express my sincere appreciation to you for time and consideration. Looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely，
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam,As I am planning to take part in the NETEM next January.（改成逗号，前边的内容不是一句话）I have decided to place an order of some essential books with due consideration of the good reputation of your store and high quality of your goods.Firstly, enclosed with this letter is a list which details these books of my requests. Secondly, I also need to know how to pay for the books. Thirdly, I wonder if it is convenient for you to deliver these books before November 1, 2011 to Peking University.I would like to express my sincere appreciation to you for（加your） time and consideration. Looking forward to your reply.Yours sincerely，Li Ming点评：8-9分写的很好，除了第一句的一个标点符号的错误，几乎没有错误，但是要尽量避免模板的痕迹。