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Dear Sir or Madam:
    I am a music fans from Chengdu. I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding the New Year Concert.
    I am planning to see the concert, so I need to know the following three. First of all, I want to confirm the date of the concert. Secondly, where is the concert's place? Thirdly, which bus can I take to get the there? I would also like to inquire if you please send me some relevant booklets about the above-mentioned aspects?
     Thank you for your consideration, your prompt attention would be highly appreciated.
      Yours sincerely,
       Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam:I am a music fans from Chengdu. I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding the New Year Concert.I am planning to see the concert, so I need to know the following three（加一个被three修饰的名词）. First of all, I want to confirm the date of the concert. Secondly, where is the concert's place? Thirdly, which bus can I take to get the（去掉） there? I would also like to inquire if you please send me some relevant booklets about the above-mentioned aspects?（这是个陈述句，用句号。这句话用在这里比较生硬，很明显是模板中的内容。） Thank you for your consideration, your prompt attention would be highly appreciated.   Yours sincerely,   Li Ming点评：7分除了第二段的最后一句，整体写的不错。