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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam:
     I am a student in Shanxi University. I am writing to ask you if there is Chinese-English dictionary in your bookstore. I have decided to place an order of one.
     Firstly, please give me some particular accounts as regards author, publishing house, price and the time of publish of the book. Secondly, I also want to know whether the dictionary can translate the Chinese sentences into English. Thirdly, I wonder if it’s convenient for you to deliver the book by EMS to the recreation center of Shanxi University. If it’s possible I want to pay it through the net.
     I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my requests. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
    Yours sincerely,
      Liming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam:（英语里用逗号） I am a student in Shanxi University. I am writing to ask you（可以去掉） if there is（加不定冠词a） Chinese-English dictionary in your bookstore. I have decided to place an order of one. Firstly, please give me some particular accounts as regards author, publishing house, price and the time of publish of the book（直接用publishing time）. Secondly, I also want to know whether the dictionary can translate the Chinese sentences into English. Thirdly, I wonder if it’s convenient for you to deliver the book by EMS to the recreation center of Shanxi University. If it’s possible I want to pay it through the net. I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my requests. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yourssincerely, Liming（Ming）点评：7分写的不错，但是第二段第一句直接用范文中的句子不太好。