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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear sir or madam,
As I am planning to take part in a chorus game. I have decided to place an order of 40 uniforms with due consideration of the good reputation of your store and high quality of your goods.
Firstly, enclosed with this letter is a list which details the style color and size of my requests. Secondly, I also need to know the terms of payments and after-sell service. Thirdly, I wonder if it is convenient for you to deliver these uniforms before September 10, 2011 to my institution of Hebei University. I have arranged to pay for the express.
I would like to express my gratitude to your kind consideration of my requirement and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely，
Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear sir or madam（Sir or Madam）,
As I am planning to take part in a chorus game. I have decided to place an order of 40 uniforms with due consideration of the good reputation of your store and high quality of your goods.
Firstly, enclosed with this letter is a list which details the style color and size of my requests. Secondly, I also need to know the terms of payments and after-sell service. Thirdly, I wonder if it is convenient for you to deliver these uniforms before September 10, 2011 to my institution of Hebei University. I have arranged to pay for the express.
I would like to express my gratitude to your kind consideration of my requirement and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely，
Li Ming （位于右下角）点评：8分写的很不错，I also need to know the terms of payments and after-sell service有点过于模板化，另外字数保持在100词。