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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am a student.Iwant to visit the military exhibtion with my classmate.I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding exhibition.
     Firstly,where is the exhibition's place in your city,which bus canI take to get there ?Secondly,please tell me a dates of its opening and closing？Thirdly,I would like to inquire if there is any discounts available on entrance tickets for student？
     Your attention to this letter would be highly appreciated.I am looking forward to hearing from you.
    Yours sincerely,
     LI Ming
   
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam,I am a student. Iwant to visit the military exhibtion（拼写错误）with my classmate. I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding exhibition. Firstly, where is the exhibition's place in your city, （加连词and）which bus canI take to get there? Secondly, please tell me a dates（单复数保持一致，建议把a改成the） of its opening and closing？Thirdly, I would like to inquire if there is any discounts available on entrance tickets for student？ Your attention to this letter would be highly appreciated. I am looking forward to hearing from you.Yours sincerely, LI Ming（Li）点评：6-7分为了避免雷同，尽量不要写模板中同样的话题。