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Dear Sir or Madam, I'm just graduated from college and became a job hunter.Last week,I obtained a informationof recruitmentabout your company from a newspaper.But I didn't understand some contents related to the advertisement and wanted to get more detailed information of the vacancy as well as your company.I particularly like to know:
    Frist,The advertisemnt mentiond " an experienced worker",did it mean the worker need the experience in similar or same job?
    Second,Do the position solve the accommadation? If do,will the expense be included in the paying?
    Third,I know about your company was set up 2 years ago from network，did it divided from A company?
     Could you please send me your replies to the above questions at your eariest convenience?More detailed nformation will be appreciated.
     Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I'm just graduated from college and became a job hunter. Last week, I obtained a（改成the，information是不可数名词） informationof recruitmentabout your company from a newspaper. But I didn't understand some contents related to the advertisement and wanted（改成现在时，因为是现在想知道） to get more detailed information of the vacancy as well as your company. I particularly like to know:【Frist（拼写错误）, The advertisemntmentiond（拼写错误） " an experienced worker", did it mean the worker need the experience in similar or（加定冠词the） same job?Second,Do（does） the position solve the accommadation（拼写错误）? If do,will the expense be included in the paying?Third, I know about your company was set up 2 years ago from network，did it divided from A（a） company?】（这些内容放在一段） Could you please send me your replies to the above questions at your eariest（拼写错误） convenience? More detailed nformation（拼写错误） will be appreciated. Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：5分一般采用三段式，第一段说明意图，第二段分条说出你的问题，第三段结尾。一定要简洁，尤其是你的第一段。另外要提高你的表达能力。