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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Miss Hu,
I'm writing in purpose of asking some messages about Moon Baby Kindgarten. I am a mother with a 2 years old baby.Nearly I am ready to choose a better kindgarten for my child.
First, I want to make clear the requirements for going into your kindgarten.For example,the age,the registered residence of this city,and the intelligence.Second, do you have some foreign teachers in your kindgarten? Third, I want to know the time of the semester.
At last, I aspire to my child go to your kindgarten, I will appreciate for the letter in reply if you as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely
LiMing
2011,24th,October
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Miss Hu,
I'm writing in purpose of asking some messages about Moon Baby Kindgarten. I am a mother with a 2 years old baby. Nearly I am ready to choose a better（没有比较的对象，用原级） kindgarten for my child.
First, I want to make clear（加介词about） the requirements for going into your kindgarten. For example, the age, the registered residence of this city, and the intelligence. Second, do you have some foreign teachers in your kindgarten? Third, I want to know the time of the semester.
At last, I aspire to my child go to your kindgarten, I will appreciate for the letter in reply if you as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely（加逗号）
LiMing点评：7分写的不错，注意以上的三个细节。