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Dear Sir and maderm I am a undergraduate graduated from the department of economic and management in Bei jing university. When scanning the net ，I noticed that employee need in your company. I am writing the letter for purpose of applying a post of personal resource managed.Since graduated in two years，I ever was a staff member of administer in Motorala Elecronnics company. During this period ，I gained abundant of experience which is in both the knowledge of work and interpersonal conference. Connected the theory with practice in woke，properly deal with acosiation of the authority and general department.I Hope that I have the opportunity to contribute to your firm. At the same time I am looking forward to hearing from soon.Call 888000 or send message to posrgrliming@xinglang.com.  Your sincerely Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir and maderm（or Madam，） I am a（应该用an） undergraduate graduated from the department of economic and management in Bei（不用空格） jing university（具体的大写，首字母要大写）. When scanning the net ，I noticed that employee need（应该是被需要，用被动语态is needed） in your company. I am writing the letter for purpose of applying（加介词for） a post of personal resource managed（manager）.Since graduated in two years（two years before），I ever was a staff member of administer in MotoralaElecronnics（拼写错误） company. During this period ，I gained abundant of experience which is in both the knowledge of work and interpersonal conference. Connected the theory with practice in woke，properly deal with acosiation（拼写错误） of the authority and general department.I Hope that I have the opportunity to contribute to your firm. At the same time I am looking forward to hearing from soon.Call 888000 or send message to posrgrliming@xinglang.com. （这一部分可以去掉） Your（Yours） sincerely（加逗号） Li Ming点评：5分第二段应该简练的介绍你的学历、经验以及对工作有帮助的personality，不能只说一个方面。