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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,I am writing this letter to inquire about the entrance to your company. I wish to apply the position of editor which you advertised in your magazine.As a graduate whose primary interest is in fashion designing, I find this job fall in with my pevious training and strength. There are some works of fashion desiging of mine in my resume, which further details my professional ability.I hope that after reviewing my enclosed resume you will kindly give me an interview so that I can elaborate on my studies and working experience. I look forward to meeting you in the near future.
    Sincerely，
    Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir or Madam,I am writing this letter to inquire about the entrance to your company. I wish to apply（正在申请，不是希望申请 改成am applying） the position of（一般用介词for，后边加不定冠词an） editor which you advertised in your magazine.As a graduate whose primary interest is in fashion designing, I find this job fall in with my pevious（拼写错误） training and strength. There are some works of fashion desiging（拼写错误） of mine in my resume, which further details my professional ability.I hope that after reviewing my enclosed resume you will kindly give me an interview so that I can elaborate on my studies and working experience. I look forward to meeting you in the near future.Sincerely，Li Ming点评：5-6分第二段写的不是很充分，可以加一些内容。第三段可以再简化一些。落款一般写Yours sincerely，….