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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear manager,
I am a user of your product. I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding the problems that I could not use that product.
First of all, what are the keyboard that is no sensitive enough. Secondly, when will the update available? Thirdly, is there any improvement of the software of time management?
I would also like to inquire to know that how could I use the program management software? Could you be so kind as to send me some relevant booklets on the above-mentioned aspects?
Thank you for you kindness, and your prompt attention to this letter will be highly appreciated.
Yours sincerely
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear manager（m大写）,
I am a user of your product. I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding the problems that I could not use that product.
First of all, what are the keyboard that is no sensitive enough（这一句话表达不清楚）. Secondly, when will the update available（这一句话表达不清楚）? Thirdly, is there any improvement of the software of time management? I would also like to inquire to know that how could I use the program management software?（这一句话可以列在上一段）Could you be so kind as to send me some relevant booklets on the above-mentioned aspects?（这应该是结尾段的内容）
Thank you for you（your） kindness, and your prompt attention to this letter will be highly appreciated.
Yours sincerely（加逗号）
Li Ming（落款位于右下角）点评：5分首先结构上要明确你每段写的内容。其次要表达清楚你的意思 |
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发表于 2017-8-6 14:08:01